Imaginary Stories February 14, 2008
Posted by smacniven in : Law Primary, Personal/Imaginative Writing , trackbackWe have been writing imaginary stories in class. We chose a genre which interested us from the following titles:
The Magic Key
No Escape
Picked For the team
Beyond the Blackhole
We then looked at a really good story and decided what was successful about it. We came up with the following Success Criteria before we started.:
1.It must have a beginning, middle and end.
2. It is important to include an obstacle or a problem and to solve it.
3. Add lots of descriptions about setting and characters. Answering the important who, what, why, when where questions.
4. To make it really interesting you could include similes, metaphors, personification etc. and include feelings and thoughts.
5. Make sure your story is balanced , including speech and narrative (telling the story)
6. Vary your sentences.
( we always try to check our spelling, grammar and punctuation in all our writing)
Our teachers marked the beginning and middle and we self and peer assessed the endings.
Please read them and let us know what you think. Are they successful?
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This is my first three paragraph’s of my story ! It is called picked for the team.
I self-assessed my work and this is what I thought,
1) I think i have included a problem and solved it quite well.
2) I think i have kept it balanced and included speech and narrative.
Picked For The Team.
“The sports day trials will be tomorrow after school” Mr Barnes read out in assembly. Laura’s face turned red with excitement as she thought about herself winning the race at sports day. Everyone’s eyes popped out of their head as they heard Mr Barnes read out the notice. Laura knew it would be hard to be picked for the team.
The day came and everyone lined up to show Mr Barnes how good they were at running. It was Laura’s turn and she was running against a girl called Eilidh and four other girls. Eilidh and Laura ran as fast as they could with the other girls a few phases behind. “And we have our two girl runners for sports day” Mr Barnes shouted “Eilidh and Laura!”
Slowly, Laura tried to get it into her head that she, Laura, would be running on sports day. Eilidh was used to it because she was picked for the team every year. Joyfully, she skipped round the corner and into the classroom where her friend George (who was also running on sports day) was sitting. George was a quiet but very smart boy. “I am running in the race with you” she said. “Great, but wont that mean we are competing against each other?” he replied. That didn’t really matter because Eilidh and John (who was a really fast runner) were racing too.
NO ESCAPE
This is the first 3 paragraphs of my story.
It was a cold, wet, windy day in mid England and Phil
And Dave was about to get on a jet to Germany and meet their Cousin. Phil and Dave knew a lot about their Cousin but they had never met. Phil and Dave were very nervous because it was the middle of the war and they were both only 17 years old. They were forced to go by their Mum because their Dad was at the war. They were about to get on the jet. CRASH!!! A bomb had hit the army base and killed 31 workers.
All they could see was smoke and huge orange flames. The whole building was burning into a million pieces. Phil shouted to the pilot “fly, fly or we will be in danger of dying “. The pilot did just that and they did not die. They felt very sick after seeing the army chief die and there best friend seriously ill.
Dave and Phil had arrived in Germany but there was no sign of their Cousin or their Dad who they had agreed to meat. They were very worried. All of a sudden their Cousin was there. But there was still no sign of Dad. Phil thought he was dead, but Phil thought he was coming. Nobody knew where he was so they had to go to their scruffy base to stay the night.
By Finn Donaldson
1)I think I’ve got good description in places and a variety of sentences.
2)It was a cold wet, windy, day in mid England.
Dad appeared out of the dark grey smoke
CRASH!!
No Escape! By Anya Telfer
This is the beginning of my story
“Have you packed your suitcases yet?” asked
dad. “Yes dad” answered Ashley. Suddenly the door swung open. “BOO!” Tommy squealed! “GET OUT!!!” shouted Ashley as she threw a big, pink, fluffy cushion at her little brother. Little brothers can be so annoying!
Ashley grabbed her purple, flowery rucksack and ran down the stairs. Tommy was already downstairs reading Deano The Dinosaur. “Tommy, Ashley hurry up we’re going,” shouted dad! Ashley reached for Tess’s red, sparkly, lead. Tess was her beautiful King Charles Spaniel. Her golden ears flopped over her hazel eyes as she rolled on the floor. “Come on Tess we’re leaving now!” called Ashley.
Ashley and Tommy clambered in the car, as dad put Tess in the boot along with the mountains of suitcases. Bob Marley’s album boomed out the car. Ashley was tossing her long, curly, brown hair about singing along and Tommy was still reading the first page of Deano The Dinosaur.
I am really pleased with the description and the depth I have used in my story.
I am peer assessing Finn’s story. I like the action straight away because it draws you in and you want to keep on reading. Welldone Finn great story!
I think Eilidh’s story has got a lot of description and that’s why I really enjoyed reading it.
I think Finn’s story was very discriptive and i like how the action all came in quite near the begining of the story ! A few mistakes have been made but the rest is very interesting. Well Done !
This is the end to my story. I am really pleased with it because I have put in some similes and feelings.
I have given similes like two guards came thumping in like elephants.
I have given feelings such as they both thought the same thing.
Peer assessment
1. I am pleased with my punctuation.
2. I am pleased with my descriptions, her hand was dripping with juice.
BANG! There was a sound coming from the door. BANG! Thump thump. CRASH! The door came crashing down. Two guards came thumping in like elephants. The guards grabbed Jessie and Lucy ”HELP” They both yeld “HELP, let us go, let us go.” The guards took no notice and pulled them outside. The best friends wondered what was going on. The girls got shoved onto a platform. They saw two ropes swinging back and forth. Then it hit them. They were going to get hanged!
As there heads were being put into the noose they both thought the same thing. This is it, we will never see each other again. Good bye but then…..
Lucy just remembered that she had taken the key so she reached into her pocket and pulled out the shiny key and CLANK, the key had fallen out of Lucy’s hand and landed at Jessie’s feet and bounced into her hands! Lucy asked herself how it slipped out of her hand. Her hand was dripping with juice. “OH YEAH, I had a carton of juice and it must have leaked.” Whispered Lucy, she shouted “rub the key.” Jessie rubbed it with her silver and turquoise ring scraping at it so it didn’t work so she threw off her ring and rubbed it again, YES they thought, it worked.
They fell from Lucy’s ceiling and landed on the floor with a thump. Lucy’s mum came in and asked curiously “What are you doing and what is all the noise?” They replied with “Nothing!” If only they had known they were getting hanged for sleeping in the mistresses bed. They were extremely lucky for rubbing the key in time.
Picked for the Team
This is the middle of my story and I am really pleased with it because…
A) I used lots of description e.g his mother turned round, the skin round her eyes was like raw meat .
B) I have added depth to my story e.g His father couldn’t have died he was indestructuble.
David entered the kitchen. Mother was making powdered eggs and Danny (his 18 year old brother) and Pops (his 93 year old, demented grandfather) were sitting with their ears pressed against the faulty wireless. Every thing seemed normal but David knew otherwise.
“David my lad” his mother turned round to face him, the skin around her eyes looked like raw meat, “Come and sit down.”
“ But I need to get Leila…” David never finished his sentence because Danny cut across him, “Leila can wait!” This was strange! Ever since his father had gone away to war nobody protester at him looking after Leila. Infact, his father not being home was the only thing that the war had done to David’s life.
David sat down at the end of the old, oak table, it was like an old man. Mother handed David a letter. He had his doubts even in the first three sentences! This didn’t feel right! He hadn’t even reached half way yet and his eyes were filling with tears, he couldn’t take it anymore. His father couldn’t have died. All around him families were losing men to battle but his father was indestructible he had told David and Leila so himself even though neither of them had understood it at the time.
Danny stood up and hugged him then there was silence. After what felt like hours the silence was broken as Leila entered the kitchen and said “Where’s my cuddle” David gave a watery chuckle.
This is the end of my story
This is what I thought about my story.
1) The things I liked about it were good description and interesting because some things might surprise you.
2) I also liked how it is not too unrealistic.
“You can start you need all the luck you can get laughed” Dale. Dale charged J and scored the first basket. J dribbled right past Dale and scored. 2-2. Dale was about to charge J when J jumped out the way and tripped Dale up. The ball went loose and J picked it up and scored. 4-2 J won.
Dale got up in a huge temper, his face blue, his eyes bulging and hairs standing on end.” I am going to kill you,” said Dale shaking and raising his fist. “I don’t think so said Coach walking in with 2 police men. “ You’re under arrest for assaulting people,” said the policeman with the gun.
“I never liked the big boy,” said Jason’s mum. He was not a nice piece of work they all agreed.” I am just happy that we all got in” said J. “Lets celebrate smiled Sam. “ It wouldn’t feel right without Jason” whimpered J. “Why don’t we have it here in the hospital” said Sam. “I would like that” squeaked Jason. “Looks like crime never works” said J.
This is my first paragraph of my story No Escape
Larry clambered down the rusty ladder, his green eyes staring into the darkness. His scruffy brown hair was blowing with the wind towards the harbour where the stunning sailing boats were bobbing about. Larry stepped onto the wet cobbled streets, still staring into the night,still wondering if his eyes were not the only ones open.
I like my start because I think the description is really good.
My Start
I like it because it is the one I spent the most time one and I had no errors in it.
The Magic Key
” Remind me again, why we had to move here.” Sam said sarcasticly. Mum gave her an angrey look and pretended to ignore her. Sam walked around her new home in dicust. The walls were a terrible colour and the dreadful carpet was hard and thin. she just wanted to go home and see her friends. And to make every thing worse, she had to hade to share a room with Sally her little sister.
As Josie lay on the medical bed Ciara jummped up. Josie was so happy to see one of here friends come and vist here.
Josie was sad that she could not go on saturday,
she was thinking that she had to get over it soon,Anyway.
No Escape my first paragraph
One foggy dark night when all the stars were out,John and Fred had to go to the army. Well didn’t have to, they wanted to go.They started to pack their things.Fred was really excited but John was a bit scared.When they stumbled out the front door John said “I wonder if we will ever be back here.”
I like my first paragraph because it’s really descriptive and it tells the reader what the story is going to be about.
This is the start of my story. My story is called The Magic Key.
Ziggy got up one bitter winters morning. He peeped out of his window and his big brown eyes widened as he saw it was snowing. He got dressed into his warmest clothes and rushed down the stairs. Ziggy sat at his kitchen table and had some toast with lovely warm milk. His sister, Milly, came and sat beside him. Then Ziggy and Milly went outside to play in the snow.
I think this paragragh is good because I have used powerful words.
My Start
I like this paragraph because it’s got lots of adjectives and I thought it was very informative.
No Escape
“Johny get over here pronto!”.”Yes sir”.”Come to the assult course with the rest of the squad”.”Yes sergant Mill”.Johny ran as fast as he could out of the shelter.He saw the rest of the squad just ahead of him.Then they stopped waiting for him at the assult course.
I thought this was a good paragragh because it drew the reader in .
No Escape
“Olly,Alfy you can come and open your presents now”, their mum balled at the top of her voce. They both shot out of their beds and tumbled down the creacky stair case tossing and turning. when they reached the bottom. Still alive.Ten at the bottome they gazed at towers of presents.”i can’t wauit to open them”Olly added. After they had opend their sparkling presents they skipped up the creacky stairs they rowled under Olly’s bed. HELP Alfy screamd. Alfy Had gon
The Great Escape
Once there was a wolf who lived in a lush green meadow in Poland.The wolf was grey with white blodges under his chin and a long grey fluffy tail .One day he heard a gun shot”its breakfast time”said the wolf licking his lips.”I wonder what it is,maybe duck or goose”.So he ran too see what it was.It was a nice plump duck”the farmers are so nice to me “he said.
I think this is my best paragraph because it draws the reader in.
“Help! help!” “hold on i’ll get the maid” “hurry! ahhhhhhhhh!!” Emily screamed as her hands sliped, making her fall through the air, tubling ,screaming, cracking & thud! Emily hit the ground with sheer force. As Kevin ran back he saw Emily on the ground “Emily” he shoughted, as he fell to his knees he started to cry. A few hours later Emily opened her eyes, “w-where am i ? “don’t worry your fine now” Emily reconised the voise instantly it was dad.
Afew dayes later…….
“Ah we’re home at last, how are you darling” Emily’s mum said.I’m fine now.
Can i just say all the stories are really good!
All the story’s are really good!!! Well Done Everyone
NO ESCAPE!
This is my beginning of my story
Far away in the stormy, blue sea Ashley and Jim were nearly at their holiday destination, when grey, gloomy clouds appeared above them. “BOOM” a big ray of lightening came shooting down. Suddenly, the dark black ship cracked right down the very middle of it. All the lights went out in a puff of smoke, everyone panicked. Then a big wave came whooshing towards the ship. “CRASH”.
“What was that?” said Ashley in a terrified voice. “I don’t know,” answered Jim. “SPLASH” Jim suddenly fell in the wavy, stormy sea. Whoosh! “Oh no.” shouted Ashley, what ever will we do?” “ Quick, go on that piece of brown wood. So they swam in a hurry and clambered on it.
Jim looked as if he was going to be sick, his face was as pale as a ghost. The moon was bright and the stars twinkled in the moonlight. Ashley and Jim dazed off in a dream.
Suddenly, Jim woke up, it looked a bit odd looking around, and he could hear the sound of birds tweeting and the sound of the ocean waves. He felt sand running through his fingers like soft sugar. Jim stood up in amazement there were palm trees, a big waterfall and surrounded by water…………………Jim gulped at that word water….”I’m on an Island” Jim shouted. He suddenly woke up. Ashley sighed “What is it Jim” Ashley sighed sleepily we are shipwrecked! Ashley pounced to her feet “Oh no, how are we going to survive? What are we going to eat? We can’t stay in these clothes forever.”
1. I am pleased about how I started my story because I have used describing words like-stormy, blue sea.
2. I am pleased about my discripcon in my story –dark gloomy sky and grey , gloomy clouds.
No Escape
Ring ring! Sally went over to answer the phone in her dressing gown and fluffy slippers. “Hello” she said no one, answered. Lilly asked who it was. “Don’t know” she said curiously. Spooky! They carried on watching the movie snuggled up in their silk, red covers, fire lit and lights turned down. This was an ordinary night for them because they always watch movies, or it was so far.
After the movie they both went to go up to their rooms, SMASH! A man burst through the window. He had a husky mask over his face and a dark blue boiler suit with blood dripping down and a long, sharp butcher knife in his right hand. Both of them ran out the front door down the street to their friend’s house. “HELP”! They screamed. Jimmy [their friend] answered the door. They burst in and locked the door. They told him all about the man and what happened.
After they had calmed down a bit they called the police. They didn’t do much about it but said they would look out for him. Sally and Jenny stayed the night at Jimmy’s while their window got replaced. The next day they went back to their house. . They bought a new burglar alarm and always locked the door.
I like my story because I have included lots of interesting descriptions like, Sally went over to answer the phone in her dressing gown and fluffy red slippers.
Magic Key
‘It’s another lovely day’ said Shaggy and Scooby looking out of the window. Scooby said there are no clouds in the sky.
‘Let’s go to the pizza shop’. Shaggy said ‘I don’t want to because I will get pizza all over my new clean green top’.
Scooby is brown with black spots, Shaggy has a green top and brown trousers. They both like pizza.
Scooby said ‘let’s go out to play in the garden’ Shaggy said ‘ok.’ So they went out to the garden and they ran to the roses because Shaggy loves the smell of them. Shaggy noticed something going in the roses so Shaggy took it out. He saw it was a magic key. Scooby and Shaggy did not see it
said if you rub this key you will get one wish. So they evaporated into the air and they thought about Iceland .
When they landed in Iceland they landed on a mountain the mountain was erupting. Then they ran down screaming in terror because it was a volcano and luckily it went into a stream .
I like my story because I wrote a beginning , middle and an end. This part of my story is the beginning.
I have got lots of feelings in my story, like I was scared and they were terrified.
I think I kept the reader interested because I kept it nice and simple.
Picked for the Team
I like my story because I have used good descriptions-Her silky, black hair flopping into a curtain over her hazel eyes.
Similes- Emma was scared now. Scared like a small mouse next to a big cat.
Sentence variety- Emma woke with a start.
When Emma was downstairs the smell of freshly cut grass reached her nose, along with a delicious smell of cooking bacon
Emma woke with a start. The morning light flooding into her large, messy bedroom with the chattering of blackbirds behind her cream curtains today was the most exciting day in her life. She was now old enough to be on her town hockey team and today the trials took place. As she kept this thought in her head, she thought she could hear the distant cheering of the crowd shouting her name as she walked on to the pitch.
“ Emma, Emma!” Emma fell out of bed, her silky black hair flopping into a curtain over her large, hazel eye. Another early morning Emma thought to herself, she didn’t understand why she should be woken when her older sister Phoebe got to get up when she wanted to. Slowly Emma got up and trudged downstairs like a lazy snail.
When Emma was downstairs the smell of freshly cut grass reached her nose, along with a delicious smell of cooking bacon. Feeling the fresh, spring air on her face through an open window Emma suddenly started to feel awake. When she was in the kitchen her mum sat her down in the large, comfy armchair and gave her good breakfast of bacon, egg and sausages.
This is the beginning of my story and I am proud of it because it is level D and I have worked hard on it by including lots of description but I have to remember question marks and use variety
The Magic Key
Wump! The jumbo jet hit the airstrip at about 160mph, the pilot slammed on the brakes, it was like he wanted to pull Cody and S.J. out of their seats. Bang! Something had exploded, “ the driver must have hit on the brakes to hard ” Cried Cody in a very scared voice. The plane tipped to the right and then the wing scraped furiously along the ground like a Cheetah on the runway. Everybody screamed for help as the plane got slower by the minute. Slam, the battered up plane had come to a halt after two minutes of terror and fear.
Cody could faintly hear the siren of the of the rescue vehicles and see his sister as a blur. He was lifted out of the plane and laid on the ground outside a vehicle with blue and red flashing lights and the letters facing backwards spelling ecnalubma. Suddenly he could see everything clearer. The fire was like a tigers mane and the small explosions were like fireworks crackling in the air.
I am working at level D
NO ESCAPE ! ! !
Here she is talking to you from a dark, dull, smelly room and there is not a ray of light to be seen. Well not by her eyes, maybe they can but she can’t. She is going to tell you her story before it’s too late. But unlike most stories, her story has no happy ending.
Poor, miserable and lonely Miss Thompson. That’s what the kids will probably call her now days. It was New Years Eve, she was roaming the streets looking for an open shop. When out of the blue there was an itchy sack over her head and she was tossed into the back of a transit van. She was petrified, she was so scared her jaw locked. She couldn’t speak nor scream.
She was unmasked to see a nice cosy office. Buzzzz, “you may come in now Miss Thompson” boomed a voice from above. She walked into to recognise it was her boss Mr Black. “Hello Mr Black” she mumbled quietly. “What do you want?” She asked mumbling again. “I want you too do a job for me.” “What sort of job” She asked in the bravest voice she could put on.
“I want you to sneak into the government buildings and take my friends files,” he said. “That would be stealing” she wined.
She never steals never has never will. She was always the kind, honest, caring one.
1. I have used paragraphs effectively.
2. I used a good story line.
These are the first two paragraphs of my story and I’m happy with it because it is exciting after the first paragraph.
What I’m happy with
1. I had a problem in the middle and I think I solved it well and I think it was very successful.
2. I had nice descriptions and feelings.
The Magic Key
“ It’s another boring day at school and I’m being bullied just because I’m well behaved”, James thought to himself. Mum was always telling him off when it was his sister Karen that did it. James thought hard to himself and thought there had to be a solution to this problem and he was determined to find it. Stumbling down the stairs like a clumsy elephant came James. Mum had made the breakfast; again it was the same old bacon and egg. Karen was still in her bed and James lifted his bag to go to school. Thinking negatively James thought, “ I hope I don’t have to go through another day of this.
As he entered the old, rusty, school gate he saw Bill but there was someone he didn’t want to see, it was Daniel his bully. Sadly James saw it coming it was another vicious attack, James was a sitting duck and he quacked like one when he felt a tug on his bag. It was no surprise, it was Daniel and by the time James looked round, his bag had been emptied on the ground. Daniel and his friends walked off laughing. James was small so he couldn’t stand up for himself and his ginger hair didn’t do him any favour at all. He also had a dork hairstyle.
The Magic Key
One day Jade was bored and she had nothing to do so she asked her mum if she could phone Sarah and ask if she was allowed out. “Yes” said mum. Jade phone Sarah and asked if she was allowed to come over. She said she could. When she came over they played a game which they found under the staircase.
Jade found a dirty, old box which she opened and Sarah heard something fall out. So she was looking around and she found a big, shiny key. It said it can take you wherever you want to go. Sarah told Jade what it said on it and Jade was surprised. They told her mum.
They had always wanted to go to Ireland but they were not sure if they should go somewhere else. So they put place names on pieces of paper and put them into a big, lovely, shiny hat. Jade picked one out and it said Ireland on it. They all packed for the holiday. Jade and Sarah were really excited about going.
They went upstairs to get the key and said “Magic Key, Magic key, we are ready to go!”
This is the start of my story and I am pleased with:
It makes me want to read more about the story and I have learned how to use speech marks.
My story is called Picked For The Team. I am aiming towards level E.
‘Our competitors today will be starting with an arabesque and then will be performing a sequence on the parallel bars,’ boomed the commentator. Sapphy stood up to see all the beautiful poise gymnasts walk out into the performing arena. Each in a different coloured leotard. Sapphy smiled in amazement but then frowned. ‘ I wish I could be a gymnast in a real squad’ she sighed.
Back at her cottage that was cobbly and old. Daniel Sapphy’s brother was having his lunch. He had to eat off a special plate as he was disabled. Suddenly, the door swung open. Sapphy ran in grinning. ‘I want to be a gymnast.’ She said proudly. She sat down on her tatty sofa and started lounging about. ‘You know we don’t have the money, we need it for Daniel,’ explained her mum. (Sapphy started to get) Tears running down her face, blotchy cheeks and a runny nose. She had an idea. What if she were to have a fundraiser. Sapphy sat up and ran through to the kitchen not stopping while shouting that she was going out to tell her friends.
My self-assessment
1. I have used speech to make the story balanced.
2. At the end it shows how she feels.
3. It also includes description.
The Magic key by Mark
All of a sudden they were back in Portugal playing football, which they did best. The football pitch was full size and the nets were green. It had lots of room for people to sit and had a running track as well. It also had Tennis Court for you to play on. About ten minutes away there was a golf course and restaurant. Tom and Robbie just played football for the whole day. It was incredible. Then it was time for dinner. They had dinner in a Hotel but it didn’t have a name.
The hotel was big, yellow and had a lot of windows. “Tom” Mum said. “Ok”. “Let us go home,” Tom said. Suddenly, they went home. The next Tom and Robbie expected to be bullied but Jim was not there, he had been trapped forever.
My self assessment
I have a simile
The lions looked hungrily towards them their teeth, sharp as a great white shark.
I have made it in different places.
We are at an arcade “ This just gets worse and worse” mum said.
No Escape
“UHHHHH!” Gareth moans. School haunts him once again. He slowly pulls his brown cosy cover clean off and hops down the cold metal stairs of his ginormous bed. His blue eyes beaming from the sun shining in the small window.“ This needs to be a great day” He says desperately. Until he remembers, his Mum!
His face drops like he was about to die, although he knows, he is not the one who is about to die!
Wet tears drip from his eyes as fast as a dog chasing an unlucky cat. He tries to regroup himself but his sensitive body and his broken face just can’t. His green rough carpet turned into a wet and soggy texture .The sun felt as dark and mysterious moon.
These were the first three paragraphs of my story and I like how
1. I used good description … He slowly pulls his brown coy cover clean off.
2. I got some effective metaphors… Wet tears drip from his eyes as fast as a dog chasing a cat.
No Escape
By Fergus McMahon law primary
It was a cold foggy night, perfect for the escape. We were finally leaving Kiel. I had lived in this part of Germany all my life but after five years of hiding from those blasted Germans it was time to go. We had been planning the escape for a whole month. I was so excited but also I was scared of what might happen. The plan was to walk to the beach where a small boat would be waiting to collect us and take us back to Scotland where father was fighting. We were ready.
We left the house in single file, keeping to the shadows. Joe was in front, I was behind him and mother took up the rear. All seemed well. We walked for 15 minutes along the narrow, cobbled streets of Kiel. The sun was beginning to rise and the fog was getting thicker. Joe shivered, “I want to go home” he whined. “Shut up” I whispered, “you’ll give us away”, but mother took pity and gave him a hug before we continued to the shore in silence. When we reached the beach I couldn’t see the boat. I began to wonder if this was going to work when I heard the shot. It was like a knife slicing through the silence. Mother collapsed, blood pouring from a hole in her chest into the smooth golden sand. Then everything went black!
Self-assessment
I like my simile; it was like a knife slicing through the silence.
I also like my description; His face was as white as a ghost , his cheekbones highlighted dramatically against his pale skin.
No Escape
In the middle of a dark Glasgow night . Trevor woke to a dark creature he said in a little squeak who are you ? Then he saw the face of it and saw his older sister . I’m going to get you for that and she ran out the room . Trevor went to close the bed room door and fell asleep again .
In the morning he went down stair’s to the breakfast table . he saw Morgan sitting down . When she saw him she started to giggle . Then Mum came through from the kitchen with our breakfast . Mum I woke up and I saw Morgan playing a scary joke on me .No you mean you were playing a scary joke on her she came through to my room and told me.No it’s the other way around then Morgan butted in no really he really scared me she said . Anyway you go out and do some thing after breakfast .